Saturday, August 6, 2011

6 Sentence Sunday: God Has No Mercy

It’s that time of week again! Thank you for stopping by to sample my Sunday Six. And a really huge thank you to everyone who has taken the time to add a comment.

Choosing only six sentences to share each week has been an educational exercise. Thinking in sixes forces me to look for the shiniest nuggets, highlights that encapsulate the mood or emotion I may have spent pages trying to establish in the book itself. I find I’m looking at my writing in a different way, with a much more critical eye. My internal editor has started telling me things like That was a boring six or Uh-oh, nothing’s really happening here. Writing well isn’t easy. Ideally, every sentence should hold the reader’s attention. Every word should sing. I’m still working at it.

The excerpts are taken from the book in chronological order and are numbered, for those of you who like to start at the beginning.

This week’s set-up:  When his doctor insisted on hiring a secretary for him, Jonathan never dreamed he would choose a woman for the job. Appalled at her presence in his home, yet fascinated despite himself, Jonathan has been spying on Isabelle from his window, hoping to catch a glimpse of her face. In this week’s 6, his curiosity has just been satisfied. Jonathan ducks behind the curtain in near panic.

A Bed of Thorns and Roses #5

Did God have no mercy? He put his hand over his heart to be certain it was still beating. No, God had no mercy for such as he.

The woman was beautiful. Breathtakingly, heartbreakingly beautiful.

He had to get rid of her.

Next week:  I think it’s time to hear from Isabelle again.

22 comments:

  1. I feel desperately sorry for Jonathan and Isabelle. I love the way you've written Jonathan's inner conflict. Can't wait for more!

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  2. I like the contrast between finding her beautiful yet wanting to get rid of her. :-)

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  3. I'm in love your characters and look forward to coming back every week. Thank you for another wonderful peek.

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  4. My first meeting with your characters, and you create so many questions in these six sentences.

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  5. Oh - I like last line - it makes me want more.

    As for picking your six - I know exactly how you feel! As I write my WIP I sometimes find a paragraph I like and pray it is only six sentences LOL!

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  6. Amazing six. I can't wait to find out more.

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  7. Wow, gut wrenching! Love the tension

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  8. OMG!LOVE that last line. (And it's so true about #sixsentencesunday forcing you to think more about what you write, isn't it? LOL!)

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  9. Well done. I need to know more about both of them. I'll be back.

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  10. Your analysis on the effect of the six is spot-on, and your selection this week incredibly evocative.

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  11. I love the tension you create with this. Poor Jonathan!

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  12. I've experienced the same reaction as you have to selecting six sentences. Makes me really look closely at what I've written! You can be proud of today's six for sure.

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  13. This book kept me awake soooo late. Really enjoyed it. Thank you for the great story : )

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  14. Love the contrast, the tension, between what he thinks and what he wants. I've been enjoying this story of yours.

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  15. You write beautifully. Essentially, you have chosen few words but conveyed a powerful scene.

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